Aphelion Issue 278, Volume 26
November 2022
Long Fiction and Serials
Short Stories
Flash Fiction
Submission Guidelines
Contact Us
Flash Writing Challenge
Dan's Promo Page

Aphelion: The Webzine of Science Fiction and Fantasy

Issue 168, Volume 16 -- November 2012


Well, that was exciting, wasn't it? I can't recall ever having been this involved in a US election before. I mean, I cared about the outcomes of previous elections, of course. But this year seems to have been particularly polarizing. Not in a good way, either. People are still buzzing about in the various social media being sore losers or sore winners. Once all that has had a bit more time to cool off perhaps people will begin to see that we can still build a better US by working together. We're all in the same boat. We'll all go down if somebody wrecks it. But let's talk about writing instead of politics...

Now one thing I believe is going to happen in the writing communities is that there will be an increase in the number of dystopian and anti-utopian stories written. Stress like this tends to bring out a lot of not-so-happy themes in writing. I know that happy endings aren't everyone's cup of tea. There might even be an uptick in the market for these sorts of stories. Let's face it, any reason for an increase in the market should be good news for writers.

We've got all these stories in our heads that we're going to write down. Some of us will be sending them out to see if someone will pay us for writing them. Some of us will be successful and some of us won't. The whys and wherefores are many. In general, the more you polish a manuscript, the better your chances of selling it. A poorly edited story is going to have a very difficult time finding a buyer. The last thing anyone wants is to spend all that time writing a story only to have a submissions editor somewhere turn it away without reading most of it. Spelling and grammar mistakes have caused the rejection of countless stories that were otherwise good. A writer can't count on keeping the interest of a reader if they aren't doing all the fine tuning that happens after “The End” is added to the manuscript.

That's the half of the writing job that bogs most people down. Everyone needs an editor. We all need to go beyond mere spell checks. We need someone to point out where we switch tenses, or drop into passive voice, or just don't explain what we're getting at. A great idea is easily ruined by technical flaws. Sure, editing is the hardest part of writing. It can also be the most frustrating. A writer can become very good at self-editing their work, yet still miss flaws that need correcting. Someone else can spot the flaws far more easily than the writer themselves. Why? Because the writer gets too close to the work. Our brains already know what we are trying to say, so these uncorrected flaws become invisible to us. We mentally project what we were trying to say over the places where we make these mistakes. Someone else won't have a clue what is in your head, so these flaws are more readily visible to them. Several pro writers I know call these people First Readers. They are a writer's second line of defense against having a manuscript rejected.

The writers themselves are the first line of defense, and the self-editing they can do before asking for the First Reader's critique. The First Reader's job is to be brutally honest with the writer, to point out every flaw and inconsistency that they can find, and to suggest possible changes to fix those flaws. This is exactly like working with an editor on a story, except the First Reader has no stake in the sale of the manuscript at all. It helps a lot if your FR is actually an editor or some sort, but it isn't totally necessary. Having an editor as a FR cuts out several further steps that will be needed if your FR is a non-editor friend willing to read and critique the manuscript.

The next step is to read the FR's critique. The step after that is to refrain from getting upset. The step after that is to correct the obvious typos and grammatical errors the FR found and decide how to address the remaining flaws. This step is rewriting places where you lost your reader. After that, you ask them to read it again. This bit repeats itself until you've fixed everything you can possibly fix. Then you format the manuscript the way whomever you're submitting it to prefers, submit it, and wait. With luck, it gets accepted. If not, you submit it elsewhere. And wait again. The waiting is the worst.


Serials and Long Fiction

Inner Child
By Colin Fenwick
Little Rock, Arkansas, might not seem like a place that would play host to supernatural creatures of great power -- some wonderful, some terrifying -- but Chiasma and Vermilion were there, and a new power was rising.

Short Stories

Shadow Aspect
By Timothy Potter
Jamie suffered from terrible headaches and night terrors. Conventional treatments had done nothing for him, but he had one last hope: -- a classified research program that promised to change his life forever.

The Woman in the Lamp
By David W. Landrum
The old brass lamp looked like something out of the Arabian Nights -- so of course it came with a djinn. The question was what to wish for...

By Roderick D. Turner
Carmine Alterra was a cop with world-wide reach, thanks to DTS teleportation. But somebody was messing with the system, taking the certainty out of DTS jumps -- with dangerous consequences.

Flowers for Ackerman
By Karen B. Kaplan
After many years of marriage, Gomer was lost without Muriel, so much so that he set aside his dislike for anything more complicated than a basic cell phone and ordered a replacement..

By D. A. Cairns
It happened suddenly: Aaron's breath, usually no better and no worse than anybody else's, became so bad that it was actually toxic. But it only happened when he was angry...

Deep Freeze
By E. S. Strout
The small Wisconsin town had once been covered by the continent-spanning glaciers during the last Ice Age. Even now, the locals referred to The Cold as if it was a current danger -- which would have been quaint if not for the recent disappearances of several visitors.

By T. Richard Williams
Jara, Frank -- and Rick -- had been caught in a classic love triangle for most of their lives. Even moving to the newly-terraformed Mars couldn't change that.
*** Contains adult language ***

By Damian Delao
Johnny was very good at what he did, and what he did was kill. Joe wanted to hire him for a very special job, one that he thought Johnny could handle, and didn't much care whether Johnny wanted the job or not.
*** Contains adult language ***

***October 2012 Forum Challenge***

Congratulations to I. Verse (again!), author of the favorite entry in the October 2012 Forum Flash Fiction Challenge. Check out "Never Let Go" and five more tales of people facing their darkest fears here, after sampling this month's editorial, poetry, short stories, and long fiction, of course...

Poetry and Filk Music

by Richard Tornello

God Particle
by Mike Berger

by Clinton Van Inman

Particular Signs
by Robin Lipinski

Puella Maris
by John M. Marshall

The Myth Of Origins and SETI Communication
by Richard Tornello


Thoughts on Writing #43: Research is Love
By Seanan McGuire
In an ongoing series, Seanan McGuire takes apart the engine of writing to find out how it works, and offers her insights into how to put it back together again. In this entry, she advises that if a character is supposed to be an expert at something, the author must research the subject or risk making errors that make the reader say "hmmm"...

Aphelion Webzine is © 1997-2013 by Dan L. Hollifield